new wording for tips dialog

can I suggest the following wording for you tips dialog the current grammar is a bit crusty:

Welcome to IntelliJ IDEA 4.0 Productivity Guide
IntelliJ IDEA has analyzed which of its features you are using and has found some that you have probably missed. May we suggest some hints that will increase your productivity! These tips will be shown while the start up process is going on. You can always get back to them by selecting Help | Productivity Guide from the men bar.


old version:


Welcome to IntelliJ IDEA 4.0
You can quickly get familiar with the main features of the IDE by reading these tips. You may try out the features described in the tips while this dialog stays open on the screen. If you close the dialog, you can always get back to it from the Help | Tip of the Day main menu item.

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Oh and it should be wellcome to theintellij productivity guide

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I like the suggested wording better too. I think it's more clear.

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Dr Gary Thomspon wrote:

can I suggest the following wording for you tips dialog the current grammar is a bit crusty:

Welcome to IntelliJ IDEA 4.0 Productivity Guide
IntelliJ IDEA has analyzed which of its features you are using and has found some that you have probably missed. May we suggest some hints that will increase your productivity! These tips will be shown while the start up process is going on. You can always get back to them by selecting Help | Productivity Guide from the men bar.


old version:


Welcome to IntelliJ IDEA 4.0
You can quickly get familiar with the main features of the IDE by reading these tips. You may try out the features described in the tips while this dialog stays open on the screen. If you close the dialog, you can always get back to it from the Help | Tip of the Day main menu item.

Done. Thanks

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Maxim Shafirov
IntelliJ Labs / JetBrains Inc.
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These tips will be shown while the start up process is going on.


The passive voice and "...is going on" feel a bit awkward to me. How about something like "IDEA will display these tips during start-up." instead?

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BTW, I would find it better, if IDEA would not close the dialog, when it
detected, that the user reads the content, e.g. because (s)he clicked
one of the buttons.

Tom

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